"Love" takes a humorous direction

No, I'm not yet again rambling on about the Simon situation. This is merely an update on my book "Another Word for Love." I just abbreviated it to "Love" for title purposes on this blog. I took a tiny break from writing for a while, and I went back and reread what I had already written, and I started to realize, my main character doesn't even have a personality! So I decided to change that, and here is a little snippet :)

“Table for two, please.” Cross said to the hostess.
She was tall and angular; her long legs seemed to go on for miles from under her black pencil skirt. Her whole body was perfectly tan, despite the fact that we were well into the fall months and the temperature was dropping quickly. I suspected fake tanner. She smiled, showing off her perfect straight bleach white teeth, flipping her long brunette hair over her shoulder as she attempted to seductively reach for two menus. The name tag that sat strategically on her large left breast read “Kandy.” It sounded like a stripper’s name. She gathered the menus and glanced up through her fallen hair at Cross, trying to flirt, I suppose.
I wasn’t even on her radar. I didn’t exist. I wanted to reach my fist and plunge it into her fake nose.
“Right this way.” She enticingly utter in a butter smooth voice. Her black kitten heels clip clopped on the tile floors, and she intentionally shook her butt in front of Cross. I felt my face get hot with anger, but when I looked at Cross, his eyes were only on me. This both surprised me, and made me uncomfortable. I was obviously very plain next to this beautiful, yet slutty girl. Why is he looking at me?


So that's it for now :) I hope her changes make her seem more human.